Don’t look up, don’t smile

Image copyright: Lucy Fridkin

Image copyright: Lucy Fridkin

Nobody underneath the path of the drone could hear it as it cruised undetected over the bay, losing height as it approached the near-deserted beach.

A thousand miles away a tall man leant over the drone pilot watching the screen. He pointed. There, he said, that family with the red towels. The pilot examined the group, noticed the man’s heavy beard, the battle scars, the adoring family.

At that point the man looked up from the beach straight into the camera.

Now, said the tall man.


That’s what I call a great family portrait, said the tall man.


Prompted by Rochelle Wisoff-Field’s weekly 100 word writing challenge found here.

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33 Responses to Don’t look up, don’t smile

  1. I’m going to think that’s a happy ending. Great twist. Good writing, Patrick.

  2. You very quickly made us suspect the worst, then – smile!

  3. gahlearner says:

    Hm, I wonder who the tall man is. Paparazzi or spy? I was expecting worse than photography though. Intriguing.

  4. rgayer55 says:

    I see a lot of drones in the Christmas sale papers. Personally, I’m not crazy about everyone having them. Might make good target practice, though.

  5. wmqcolby says:

    They make great blenders.

    Terrific story-telling, Patrick!

  6. A very interesting take on the prompt. MMMmmm. Well done.

  7. michael1148humphris says:

    Drones. I can see some good uses for them but the bad things they are put to far outweighs the good. Even your story hints at this. Well done

  8. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    I was holding my breath for the tragic end that was sure to come and was not expecting the nice ending.

  9. ansumani says:

    Technology can be used for good and bad purposes. Hopefully we see more good in the world. Good story.

  10. HonieBriggs says:

    Creepy drones. Fierce drones. Deadly drones. Got it.

  11. Iain Kelly says:

    Excellent take on the prompt, like others have said, something ominous about the drones.

  12. Michael Wynn says:

    However, they are used there’s something sinister about drones, even the word seems sinister

  13. Patrick, when are these stories of yours going to become a collection, in a book?

  14. neilmacdon says:

    paparazzi,or predator? How big is the difference?

  15. kirizar says:

    It does sort of suggest that the drone is much more sinister than a paparazzi gone wild. One question, how did the man a thousand miles away know it would be the family with the red towels?

  16. Dear Patrick,

    Is the tall man paparazzi or predator? A bit menacing either way, I think. Well done.



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