Image copyright: C.E. Ayr

Image copyright: C.E. Ayr

He had to get away and take his family with him. He had satirized The Leader, mocked his tweets, doubted his ability to rebuild the country.

Only last night he had had a visit – men in sharp suits knocking at his door, asking him where he was born, reminding him they knew where his children went to school, pointing out the building where his wife worked, advising him to conform.

In the early hours they packed a pushcart, walked to the railway.

“Which way?” he asked.

“North,” said the doctor.

“We all go north,” said the teacher.

And they did.


Written in response to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ weekly writing prompt posted from a secure cave in the side of some remote and unnamed mountains. You can participate by clicking here.

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24 Responses to Tracks

  1. ahtdoucette says:

    Haunting story. I love the last line with its hints of hope but maybe not. Well written.

  2. rgayer55 says:

    I’m sure the prison for political enemies is already under construction, and don’t expect the detainees to be provided with cell phones and Twitter accounts. I hope Dale has room for us all north of the border.

  3. You cannot flee towards the south.. there is a big wall there.

  4. mjlstories says:

    Room for one more? I’ll take my turn with the cart.

  5. Sad reality of a world filled with power drunk people.

  6. Dear Patrick,

    Like Kent I wanted to laugh, but I also want to cry (and never stop). Let’s hope this isn’t prophetic.



  7. Michael Wynn says:

    Disturbing as it’s happened before and will happen again

  8. Sandra says:

    Grimly prophetic. This is a week I might have to avoid watching the television.

  9. yarnspinnerr says:

    This flash may well be prophetic for some in this wide world this year.

  10. wmqcolby says:

    This made me laugh for some reason, I don’t know why. Good job, Patrick. 😀

  11. Dale says:

    So many have threatened to come up here… 😉

  12. We all go north. See you there.
    Great piece!

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