The Descent of Man

 

Image copyright: Marie Gail Stratford

 

They lay facing away from each other each surreptitiously checking their watches.

Damn, he thought, it was supposed to be a one-night stand, wham bam thank you mam and yet I’m still here.

Damn, she thought, it was supposed to be a one-night stand, but he’s still here.

“Go buy some croissants to go with the coffee,” she commanded.

A minute later he returned. “Lift’s broken.”

She raised her eyebrows, smiled. He turned to the stairs. Only twelve flights down, only twelve up, he thought.

At the seventh floor he realises he remembers her name. Must be love.

Written for Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ weekly 100 word challenge found here. And I can’t comment on your pieces because I have bad wifi and am on a stupid iPad which is all terrible.

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40 Responses to The Descent of Man

  1. Sounds like the unexpected happened. I hope there’s a happy ending. šŸ™‚ — Suzanne

  2. i b arora says:

    great find by him, deserves some credit

  3. madamewriter says:

    Intriguing romance here, with a nice modern garnish. Well done!

  4. I love this kind of a romance, not to fluffy.

  5. ansumani says:

    ha ha. He must have passed her first test. Nice one.

  6. ceayr says:

    Neat tale, grey humour.

  7. gahlearner says:

    I think this love may be a bit one-sided. Or a test. He does follow commands nicely. Poor guy, great story.

  8. liz young says:

    Not a romance made in heaven, but one made on the eighth floor?

  9. oldentimes says:

    Seventh story up or down? If it’s going down, good, on the way back, he needs to think harder.

  10. Jan Brown says:

    Twelve flights, just to get her breakfast! Yes, must be love. Or really strong lust šŸ˜„

  11. IfeomaO says:

    Almost went with a one-night stand theme, but you did a wonderful job :).

  12. If he returns the 12 flights..THAT is love! lol

  13. Dale says:

    Now if she remembers HIS name… we’ll call it love at first sight… šŸ˜‰

  14. It takes true love to remember her name

  15. storydivamg says:

    And here I thought I was going to read yet another “jump off the building” story. Good, creative stuff, Patrick.

    All my best,
    Marie Gail

  16. wmqcolby says:

    Fun title! Funny story, too. Makes me think why that phrase, “No sex, please, we’re British” was invented in the first place. šŸ˜‰ Wonderful job, Patrick. And nobody jumped out a window.

  17. Mike says:

    Just had to laugh, enjoyed this.

  18. Dear Patrick,

    I’ll link your story. No problem. iPad’s really are terrible or this. Your story, on the other hand, is not terrible.

    The building may be high but his standards seem pretty low. šŸ˜‰ Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  19. If he comes back with the croissants, then maybe she’ll think about it!

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