Paradise Lost

Image copyright: Marie Gail Stratford

Image copyright: Marie Gail Stratford

Picture a hi-tech laboratory, Silicon Valley, late Saturday night.

Two innocents keeping their heads down, she developing an algorithm to die for, he soldering together some artificial intelligence. Despite earlier world-changing successes, they are both introverted, privacy-driven, shunning the glare of publicity.

At midnight he stands, stretches, offers her coffee. They sit together, sipping, chatting. Soon their clothes lie strewn across the floor as they partake of the forbidden fruit.

On the cluttered benches around them – machinery humming, micro cameras filming, spyware spying.

Within minutes Facebook will wreak its havoc while back to the thicket slinks the guilty serpent.

 

Written in response to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ weekly 100 word challenge. Find it here.

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40 Responses to Paradise Lost

  1. WOW! This was a brilliant, totally brilliant and ironic allegory! Among my favorite set of lines is this, “At midnight he stands, stretches, offers her coffee. They sit together, sipping, chatting. Soon their clothes lie strewn across the floor as they partake of the forbidden fruit.”
    Delicately put! Also, very believable.

  2. That’s terrible, but they should have known. Cameras are “everywhere” these days. Even in the old days those things leaked out unless someone was paid off. Well written, Patrick. —- Suzanne

  3. Even the most technologically savvy can fall prey to the serpent 😉

  4. Sarah Ann says:

    Love it. That blasted serpent gets everywhere.

  5. Two innocent geeks I feel. Caught out by their own doing (perhaps on two counts). Facebook will tell all.

  6. Sumana Roy says:

    a modern day world where privacy has been sacrificed…

  7. Alas.. not even nerds are safe from the modern day serpent.. but maybe they will get married and live together with a whiteboard in their bedroom.. (yes I remember hearing of such a couple).

  8. The serpent starts everything bad. We humans sure know how to keep it going though.

  9. micklively says:

    It’s what shower rooms were made for.
    Good piece.

  10. Sandra says:

    Nightmare scenario. And a vindictive technological set up! Good one.

  11. Wow – I wasn’t expecting that!

  12. Dale says:

    A match made in heaven… sadly privacy seems to be at a premium. They should have known better!

  13. I have a feeling that slimy slinky serpent has a satisfied look on his face.

  14. Aw, can’t even indulge in a bit of fun after hours. Such a shame. LOL. 🙂

  15. k rawson says:

    Lol, well they really should have known better! Good one!

  16. ansumani says:

    ha ha. An introverted geeks worst nightmare may be about to come true…but maybe with her algorithm and his AI they can slay the serpent… Nice Story!

  17. Oh those late nights between introverts. Fun take on the prompt.

  18. Ha ha, this was real-time action, not virtual nookie?

  19. gahlearner says:

    Ah, these poor nerds. Looks like places to taste the forbidden fruits are hard to find these days, when even game is monitored in the forests. Good story.

  20. Dear Patrick,

    Nothing’s sacred in this high tech world we live in, is it? But you know what they say about all work and no play. 😉 Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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