On the Bus

Image copyright: Claire Fuller

Image copyright: Claire Fuller

“Hello. Day out with the kiddies?”

“Yeah. Off to the ODHO at the power station.”


“Yeah, it’s …

(OK you two calm down)

… it’s short for open day, hands-on.”

“Sounds fun.”

“Yeah, protective gear, respirators. We get to punch buttons, spin wheels, …

(no, we’re not there yet; be patient)

… pull levers and so on.”

“Sounds a tad dangerous?”

“No, nothing can go wrong, …

(I told you to go before we left home; you’ll just have to wait)

…  safe as houses.”

“Well, here’s my stop. Enjoy yourselves.”

“Chernobyl, Fukushima, say thank you. Manners! Tsssk!

Written for Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ weekly 100 word challenge. Find it here.

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43 Responses to On the Bus

  1. gravadee says:

    very different take on the prompt

  2. Margaret says:

    Hands on at the power station! Dangerous excursion – disturbing little story.

  3. What could possibly go wrong with names like that? Waiting for the BOOM!

  4. Nothing can go wrong…Heard it so many times. I loved it, the tone is set so well.

  5. draliman says:

    Uh oh. Nothing good can come of this field trip. I like the little bits in brackets, adds realism.

  6. mjlstories says:

    Hey, that’s my class isn’t it…or was.
    Good fun!

  7. What could possibly go wrong? Radiant fiction.

  8. Especially the “it can’t go wrong” made me shiver.. there is always a cause isn’t it?

  9. Melanie says:

    Love the personification here. 🙂

  10. gahlearner says:

    This is great. I love it, names, ‘education’ and all.

  11. micklively says:

    Can he raise a Five Mile Island too?
    Good piece.

  12. Funny stuff this week Patrick.

  13. Dale says:

    Love the kids’ names… not a sign at all… 😉

  14. SarCou says:

    Ah community engagement. Sometime, it’s just best not to! Great piece!!

  15. Joy Pixley says:

    I really like how you used the asides to show how distracted and noisy this situation is, and how easily some kid could do something without anyone noticing in time!

  16. Hmmm sounds like an ODHA might not be such a good idea at a power station. Nice story.

  17. Graham Lawrence says:

    Gives me a sort of Deja vu. What an adventure being a parent. Nice story.

  18. ceayr says:

    Chuckling darkly at the black humour.
    Love it.

  19. Sandra says:

    Loved the style of this. Made me grin in a wry sort of way. Well done

  20. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Patrick,

    You’ve laid bare the dirty secret of it all. it’s already like that. Well done, sir.



  21. Dear Patrick,

    Nothing can go wrong. (wink, wink) Perhaps “hands on” isn’t such a great idea. Good one.



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