Not One Of Us

Image copyright: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Image copyright: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields


“Oh, hello, nice to see you. Cup of tea?”

“Yeah. Builders’, please.”

“So, what’s up? Shouldn’t you be at work?”

“It’s all falling to pieces, ma. The wedding is off. We need to cancel everything.”

“Off? Cancel? Why?”

“Ah, met with the future parents-in-law last week and … .”

“So? You’ve met them many times before. That’s not special.”

“At their home. First time I’ve been there.”

“Bad hosts, eh?”

“No, ma, excellent hosts.”

“Well then?”

“Bad taste. The place is baroque, overblown. You should see their chandeliers.”

“Oh dear. New money, eh?”

“Yeah ma, not one of us.”


Written for Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ weekly 100 word challenge found here.

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43 Responses to Not One Of Us

  1. rgayer55 says:

    Thank goodness he found out in time. Imagine the scandal, and what the tabloids would have done with this, if the wedding had gone through.

  2. gahlearner says:

    This is great. Every aspect of it.

  3. storydivamg says:

    Methinks the betrothed will be better off without this snotty individual as a spouse. Nice work capturing the sense of “old money” versus the “noveau riche.”

    All my best,

  4. phylor says:

    Not one of us! Marriage as money/status not as love. Don’t let the wrong person into the family circle. His parents complaining he is engaged to a rich bi**h snob and he should marriage one of their us. That is if I have the genders right!
    Enjoyed the story!

    • Pleased you enjoyed it. Re genders, the mum is definitely a female. The others, well, I kept gender out of it to avoid reader bias. But I imagine my writing is ‘masculine’ as many comments suggest the male is the baddie here. Damn.

      • phylor says:

        Writing gender neutral is tough. People will assign a gender to the characters. I enjoy it when half see female and half see male.

  5. Here I’ve been drinking my “builder’s tea” all these years and never known what to call it. Thanks for the googleducation. Now to go find some new money at which to look down my nose. 😉 Well done.

  6. Margaret says:

    Intriguing possibilities here. Who’s male and who’s female? Old money vs new money or no money vs new money? My imagination can make three or four different stories from what you’ve written. Most enjoyable and very clever.

  7. ‘Not one of us’ – still got a class divide but this time from the other side – great take on the prompt.

  8. Melanie says:

    So love doesn’t conquer all. Poor chap. I hope that tea is comforting.

  9. DeeDee says:

    Golddigger sorts, Nice take to the prompt

  10. Does that still happen? I think the girl has had a lucky escape. He couldn’t have loved her that much.

  11. One of “those” families with the loud money, eh? That would never do! I love it! 🙂

  12. Sandra says:

    Oh yes, beautifully done! Good one.

  13. Dear Patrick,

    Can’t mix new money with old snobs. Well done. The dialogue tells the story.



  14. micklively says:

    Can’t have parvenu in the family: might start breeding some intelligence in and then where would we be?
    Good piece.

  15. Nice story…well written.

  16. Ah.. such contempt… probably a good reason not to marry.

  17. Helluva reason to call off the wedding but I think he is doing his bride a favor.

  18. Vinay Leo R. says:

    Can see that happening. Oh yes. Could imagine even the era.

  19. Lynda says:

    Clever take! I like it. 🙂

  20. ansumani says:

    Is it the old money’s contempt for new money or Good taste versus bad taste? Either way, I guess they were not “one of us”.

    Nicely done story.

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