Pilgrims

image copyright: Madison Woods

image copyright: Madison Woods

Above them the pale blue unblinking sky arced from horizon to horizon, its monotony unbroken by cloud. Around them, brown earth stretched as far as the eye could see, the absence of any structure, natural or man-made, accentuating the curvature of the earth.

He studied the tap with a cautious eye, wondering what it was doing here, right here, wondering how it came to be. No path, no track, no road led to this place.

He filled the cups with the fresh clean water and passed one to the child. They drank copiously.

Shouldering their burdens, they walked on.

Written for Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ Friday Fictioneers 100 word challenge.

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38 Responses to Pilgrims

  1. Great description, Patrick. I’ve heard of springs popping up, but not complete with faucets. That’s a creative something that’s been added. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne

  2. Margaret says:

    What a mystery! A fascinating idea – it got my imagination working. I like it.

  3. Nice work Patrick. I feel almost a fearful despair in these words.

  4. I think ancient aliens left it. Or scientologists.

  5. I almost expected it to be kool aid 😉

  6. gahlearner says:

    This is the magical tap that appears when you need it most. Sorry, just playing around with your idea. The description and building of the atmosphere is great.

  7. mjlstories says:

    Really intriguing…
    My thought was someone’s starting to hallucinate but actually many possibilities.
    The presence of the unnamed child adds to the mystery.

  8. subroto says:

    Sounds like the start of a dystopian novel. Nice one.

  9. Echoes of Cormac McCarthy too… and the Rolling Stones. Great world-building with a few words. Well done.

  10. really enjoyed this. It now has me wondering why is it out there? Why are they out there? Desperate in more ways than having to drink the water.

  11. An interesting and intriguing take on the photo – cautiousness outweighed by necessity.

  12. I really like this, it paints a clear picture

  13. I guess if you’re on a long journey like that, you take free water without questioning it. This hints at an interesting, much larger back story.

  14. storydivamg says:

    Hmmm . . . interesting snapshot. Not really a complete story, but a clear picture to share nonetheless.

    All my best,
    Marie Gail

  15. The tap seems like a tiny ray of hope in an endless circle of dread.Kudos.

  16. Dear Patrick,

    Magic on tap? Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  17. ansumani says:

    Divine intervention maybe? Its an intriguing story ..feels like they were looking for faith and found it.

  18. micklively says:

    Has a Stephen King feel to it.
    Good piece.

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