Boy Blue

Image copyright: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Image copyright: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

He stood, as usual, behind one of the pillars, unseen, waiting for her to emerge for her usual early morning walk, silk parasol in a gloved hand.
It was their routine, part of their pattern of life – he would watch, she would walk. And after her walk, she would re-enter the hall, he would return to the village, to the forge.
This was the pattern that sustained him, that kept him alive despite the grind of his life, of his surroundings.
In the afternoons, suitably chaperoned, she would receive eligible young men in the drawing room.
Soon she would wed.

This for Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ weekly 100 word challenge.

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47 Responses to Boy Blue

  1. Jessica says:

    What I really enjoy about this piece is that it’s from a guy’s point of view. I’m a huge fan of Regency era romances and it’s always the girl pining after the guy. I appreciate the other perspective.

  2. Ah, the heartbreak…so well captured.

  3. AnnIsikArts says:

    The social divide still exists, it’s just not this obvious anymore. Nice tale of unrequited love and discrimination. I like your props. 🙂

  4. Sarah Ann says:

    Wonderful how you portray the social stratification of the time (whatever era it is). It’s sad that these two cannot be together. I hope, for the blacksmith’s sake, his visits stop once she is wed.

  5. Nan Falkner says:

    Dear Patrick, Great story, and yes it’s sad – but so is parts of real-life. Excellent and he’ll be happy as can be soon. Nan 🙂

  6. Very well-written and bittersweet. Great job.

  7. Margaret says:

    How sad for Boy Blue. You’ve painted his predicament so movingly – I wonder if she knows.

  8. Maree Gallop says:

    A well written story. Your descriptions were great I could visualise the whole story. Bittersweet ending.

  9. The story of my life! Not really – a very enjoyable read.

  10. storydivamg says:

    Dear Patrick,
    The hope and the romantic intrigue that carries us through the story ends with a sort of death knell. Skillfully told. Great title.

    All my best,
    Marie Gail

  11. Poor guy (literally and figuratively). She could have been so happy with him too, what a shame 😦

  12. latasun says:

    Its a sweet story. How much he is hurt everyday by seeing her welcome suitors. Sigh!

  13. Unrequited love is so sad.

  14. I agree…20 years time. Her children will leave the nest and she will find that her heart really rests with this man that has always loved her from a distance. They will get together, have a tryst and then … sorry, just having a little fun.

  15. helenmidgley says:

    I’m a sucker for historical romances. Shhh its a guilty pleasure, don’t tell anyone. Fab piece 🙂

  16. paulmclem says:

    Touching tale. Our man needs to reset his sights on someone who’ll have him for who he is, and what he is. If not he’ll be in for a lonely, sad life.

  17. Sandra says:

    Beautifully simplistic in both style and sentiment. Very well done.

  18. elmowrites says:

    I like how you portray this without a hint of bitterness. It’s bittersweet, but not through the narrator’s eyes, and that innocence shone through. Leaves me wondering if she knows he’s there…

  19. A beautiful little snap shot into the past.

  20. Sigh. So sweet and sad. Well done.

  21. Such longing in this story.. how sad to just be the observer, but those barriers of class is always there.

  22. Dear Patrick,

    How sad that he can only admire her from a distance. A bittersweet story. Well done.



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