Not This Time

Image copyright: Claire Fuller

Image copyright: Claire Fuller

Martens shone his standard issue flashlight into the workshop pit hoping that he wouldn’t see what he already knew he would see.

He’d got the smell of blood even before he and Rubens had forced open the rusting doors. The toxic cocktail of smouldering tyres, diesel fuel, and motor oil couldn’t hide it.

He knew there would be no prints or DNA to help with the investigation, and even if there had been, they’d soon be lost.

Only he could detect the mayor’s perfume and that wouldn’t stand up in court.

They slammed the doors closed and walked away.


You have been reading yet another episode in the lives of Martens and Rubens, this time prompted by the Friday Fictioneers 100 word challenge. Any information that leads directly to the prosecution of Mayor Clancy will be generously rewarded.

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41 Responses to Not This Time

  1. Well done, very captivating.

  2. wmqcolby says:

    Wow! Packs a wallop. Nice work, Patrick!

  3. Good bit of writing Patrick. I feel the Mayor is due a comeuppance shortly

  4. Margaret says:

    They’re a couple of sharp-nosed detectives, but they’ve got their work cut out for them with the mayor, I suspect. Lots of tension here. Their frustration comes through strongly too. good story.

  5. Sarah Ann says:

    I like this pair. Great olfactory descriptions – pity his nose and sense of smell isn’t enough to go to court with. I got great visual from this piece too, unfortunately.

  6. Knowing and proving are two different things.. one day they will nail her (hope literary)

  7. Patrick, Hopefully they’re closing in. Great description. Loved the video. Well written. 🙂 — Susan

  8. Is it Scent of a Woman or Scent of a Man? Something smells rotten in the state of Denmark! Intriguing plot ahead.

  9. Maree Gallop says:

    Ooh I like that story. There’s a whole other story around that perfume I suspect!

  10. This seems like an introduction to a more wordy story. Is this something you are working on? If not, it should be.

  11. Oohh I could read lots more. Thrilling.

  12. Great take on the prompt! Murder mystery extraordinaire. Alicia

  13. It’s a shame what some people can get away with. Great take on the prompt.

  14. Dear Patrick,

    Powerful and disturbing. Love the scent of your story.



  15. Sandra says:

    That second paragraph is a corker in terms of atmospherics. I could have been there. Well done.

  16. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Patrick,

    Ever read Perfume? Great novel. Your MC has a good sense of smell. Well done.



  17. J says:

    Dang – that must be *some* perfume!
    Great writing —-

  18. storydivamg says:

    In a way this reminds me of the way President Snow in the Hunger Games Trilogy always smelled of blood and roses. Perhaps a canine unit would be helpful in catching Clancy?



  19. I’d comment, but I don’t want to get into a political discussion, Patrick. 🙂


  20. Geez politicians get away with everything, even murder? Great story once again Patrick!

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