Nightmare

Hey Joe, he mused, this isn’t how I expected it to be. How had it come to this? The view of genteel suburbia, children’s parks, and well tended gardens, the sweet, clean-scrubbed carers who never failed to look in on him every half-hour and who were responsive to his every legal need.

Fed through a tube; no burgers.

He had the right to be angry; he had paid his dues. The scars and tattoos that littered his body told the story. Three wives. Served time.

All day music: Doris Day, Leonard Cohen, late Presley.

Where was Hendrix when you needed him?

For Rochelle Wisoff-fields’ Friday Fictioneers 100 word challenge

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28 Responses to Nightmare

  1. Sarah Ann says:

    Great use if music to shock this home and help the reader feel his pain.

  2. Dear Patrick,

    What a way to end up. Worst of all, Doris Day. Grisly.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  3. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Patrick,

    El’s comment says it all. This is a brilliantly imagined nightmare… Well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  4. elappleby says:

    Hey Joe 🙂 Clever story. I’ve spent the last ten minutes trying to think up a clever comment starting with ‘where you goin’ with that….’ but I’ve given up because the best I could come up with was ‘catheter in your hand’ which really doesn’t work. In my defence, I’m ill and my brain is addled.

  5. Patrick, Good and well-written stroy. It’s a good thing we can’t see ahead. He’s led a hard life and it isn’t getting better. At least he has caregivers and isn’t laying in a dirty hovel. Well done. 🙂 —Susan

  6. draliman says:

    Sounds like my nightmare too. Poor chap.

  7. Sandra says:

    All day Leonard Cohen… might have pressed all the buttons once but not anymore. Very effective piece Patrick.

  8. Ellespeth says:

    The things we don’t expect…
    Ellespeth

  9. This is a bitter/sweet story! Great take on the prompt.

  10. Such a sad story, to be that kind of a prisoner.

  11. camgal says:

    Well that’s just sad. Good story telling )

  12. This was really sad – good job.

  13. EagleAye says:

    No doubt. After all that, and you can’t have any Hendrix? Well it just isn’t worth it anymore.

  14. No burgers and no Hendrix; kill me now!

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