“Still blowing a blizzard then?” shouted Rusty as Clint threw himself into the tent.

“Yeah, but we don’t give up. Only two thousand feet more. We can be up and down in eight hours.”

“We’ve done well. Come far together. As mates. As climbers.”

Clint didn’t answer immediately. He knew Rusty was having an affair with his wife and he knew Rusty didn’t know he knew.

“Yeah, good mates.” Clint lit another candle.

“So tomorrow,” asked Rusty, “That ice bridge. Reckon we’ll be okay?”

“Yeah, we’ll be roped up, if, y’know … .”

Clint smiled to himself in the semi-gloom.


This for Rochelle’s Friday Fictioneers 100 word challenge.

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52 Responses to Mates

  1. Pretty foreboding.. I guess the fall will be long… aaahaaahhahhaaaa

  2. Subroto says:

    Where’s Rusty’s side of the story? Maybe both are in for a surprise. Great revenge story.

  3. Ade Branwell says:

    Great revenge story!

  4. Patrick, nicely done! Now let’s read the next chapter and see what happens next ….

  5. duskyisbeautiful says:

    So much packed in 100 words… very well written.

  6. Partrick, Good story with a lot of tension. I don’t think I’d try anything with a person I was roped to. We might both go down. Well written. 🙂 —Susan

  7. annesquared says:

    So much for the buddy system 😉
    Good read!

  8. There’s an icy wind a blowin’ and it ain’t outside.

  9. Alice Audrey says:

    Such a devious plan he has in mind.

  10. Very clever, Patrick. 100 words is just perfect for meaningful snapshots of time – not quite at the action, but at the build-up. Great rhythm and pace, I agree with Dreamer of Dreams.

  11. I think Clint should take the high road and climb the rest of his life road with different partners. Good story.

  12. elappleby says:

    Wonderful! Fantastic build up and I love Clint’s smile in the semi-gloom. I think Rusty may be in trouble…

  13. Dear Patrick – I love revenge and on a dangerous mountain – wow this is excellent! I enjoyed reading it and guessing who is coming off the bridge on the other side? Well done! Nan 🙂

  14. Sandra says:

    Not looking good for Rusty then. Great take on the prompt.

  15. That story leaves me with a sense of dread. Well done!

  16. Shandra says:

    oh boy. Delicious thriller in the making. (similar thought patterns this week, eh?) Well done.

  17. All for the love a woman…or is it more about ego?

  18. As if the climb wasn’t risky enough- now there’s vengeance thrown into the mix! A perfect recipe for disaster. Though, I don’t feel bad for Rusty one bit. What was he thinking going on a private expedition up a mountain with Clint?! I love the multiple genres of your story. A very intriguing read!

  19. EagleAye says:

    Ooh. Note to self: never go on a dangerous expedition after sleeping with your partner’s wife. This is a brilliant idea and so well-written. I really enjoyed it.

  20. yarnspinnerr says:

    The sinister touch beautifully achieved. 🙂

  21. Pawan Hegde says:

    Everything about this story is perfect. It gives you just enough information to wonder what happens next. There’s so much to learn from this. 🙂

  22. Dear Patrick,

    Little does Rusty know what Clint knows and what we all now know. Oh no! Good build of tension.



  23. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Patrick,

    This is why you don’t &^%$ where you eat. Great story here. It makes me wonder who really knows what and what will transpire on the ice bridge.



  24. Jan Brown says:

    This story has just the right amount of tension, foreboding and delicious revenge!

  25. curiouserediting says:

    Okay, I’m new to your blog, but love the idea and was interested in the storyline very quickly. I see someone already commented on it, but great pacing there. Good job!

  26. Whew! That was brilliantly done! Perfectly structured, good pacing, taut and spare. Love it!

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