The Red Roof

“I didn’t think the roof was meant to be red,” said Noah, checking the sky for rainclouds.

“Picky, picky,” she said, “Ever since we got married. My mum warned me you’d be like that.”

“It’s just that the spec was so, er, specific. All those cubits. I’m sure there was nothing about red.”

“Whatever. How about the gangplank? Piece of art, that. It’ll polish up a treat.”

“Yeah. The boy done good. Look at those joints.”

“No nails or screws. All properly pegged.”

“Made from sustainable timber.”


“And just feel that grain.”

“I quite like the red.”

“It’ll do.”


Written for Friday Fictioneers.



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22 Responses to The Red Roof

  1. Very humorous and well done. I don’t think God was concerned about the red roof. There’s a lot of color in the world.

  2. Sarah Ann says:

    A great take on the prompt. Trust Noah to be worried about a minor colour issue with everything else he’s got on. But at least there’s a beautiful gangplank, beautifully described. Love that line about, ‘My mum warned me…’ 🙂

  3. Sandra says:

    🙂 Made me grin. A very convincing dialogue Patrick.

  4. Nan Falkner says:

    Enjoyed this a lot! I laughed out loud at this. Thanks for the humor! Nicely done, Nan

  5. Sun says:

    love the red roof addition, Patrick. styling! 😛

  6. Patrick, perfect reading for a Sunday morning before church. 🙂


  7. Wonderful… very good description on the gangplank..

  8. Patrick, very clever and humorous! I really enjoyed this one. There’s another by Siobhan, who ran with a take off on Huck Finn… similar vibe, and both very clever! Nice job.

  9. Dear Patrick,

    Feels like being there. Personally, I like the red roof. Nice one.



  10. atrm61 says:

    A cute and original take Patrick-made me smile 🙂

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